Friday Fictioneers: 18th January 2019

This week’s photo is provided by Dale Rogerson. You can check out Rochelle’s challenge and how to participate here

The trauma of her abuse went beyond imagination.
This was how she saw herself in her nightmares, a broken being held together with sticky tape.
Her neck was a bit skinny perched precariously on her shoulders, but she felt she’d got the angle of her head just so, her blindfolded eyes downcast, nose in profile and mouth silenced.
She couldn’t get her hair quite right, continually building it up rather than stripping it off the surface and starting again.
She said she no longer had a body.

With tears in their eyes, the doctors wondered how they could help her.

100 words

My apologies for such a dark piece, it just turned out that way.


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and am a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! Due to a nightmare of a house sale in 2014, 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat until April 2017. We made strong friendships both on and off the water, and enjoyed swan and duck families for neighbours. Sadly times change and we now reside in a small bungalow a short distance from the beach on the Lincolnshire coast.
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36 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: 18th January 2019

  1. Dale says:

    Oh my goodness, Di. That poor thing… wonderful descriptions of a girl who feels disembodied by her trauma.

  2. iScriblr says:

    Wow, this is brilliant! Heartfelt!

  3. Wow very dark and very wonderful

  4. I think this is what it means to feel disembodied. So well done!

  5. neilmacdon says:

    There is nothing so strange as the inside of another human head. You took us there

  6. Sadje says:

    Very imaginative.

  7. Iain Kelly says:

    Very dark indeed. The only glimmer of hope perhaps that the doctors are there for her now.

  8. You made me look at the photo again and this time I saw her head in profile. Amazing take on the prompt – well done!

  9. A very creative take on the prompt. I did not notice the profile until reading your story. A tragedy, a broken being barely held together. Hoping the doctor can help. Great job!

  10. Jelli says:

    good piece. The dark fits perfectly with this write. 🙂

  11. gahlearner says:

    Dark and heartbreaking. The aftermath of the abuse stays even if she seems safe now.

  12. Sandra says:

    Sometimes there’s just nowhere else to go except out onto another plane somewhere. That dissociation was nicely done.

  13. draliman says:

    Very dark, the poor woman.

  14. Deep dark and depressing. Hopefully, they’ll find a way in time.

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

  15. Extraordinarily well written, brings a lump to your throat

  16. michael1148humphris says:

    Powerful and sad,

  17. amiewrites74 says:

    Dark, yes, but so very well written.

  18. You left us with a heart aching end, with the doctors also wondering how they could help and no clear solutions.

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