Friday Fictioneers 6th July

Thanks Rochelle

PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

He was lost.
After all this time, somewhere familiar was no more and he felt lost.
Where had the trees gone? The boating lake, the flowers?
He didn’t like this concrete jungle.
It was impersonal, hard, unyielding.
He felt out of step, out of place with his surroundings.
Time to move on and put his best foot forward.
Oh, yeah.
Better amend that.

64 words

About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination and wacky sense of humour which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and am a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! We have recently lost our beloved dog Maggie who adopted us as a 7 week old pup in March 2005. We decided to have a photo put on canvas as we had for her predecessor Barney, and now have three pictures of our fur babies on the wall as we found a snapshot of my GSD so had hers done too. From 2014 to 2017 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat where we made strong friendships both on and off the water. We were close to nature enjoying swan and duck families for neighbours, and it was a fascinating chapter in our lives. We now reside in a small bungalow on the Lincolnshire coast where we have forged new friendships and interests.
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17 Responses to Friday Fictioneers 6th July

  1. Hilarious ending, well done. You could sense his disenfranchisement with the place

  2. Dale says:

    Love adding the little bit of humour to this somewhat serious internal dialogue…

  3. Iain Kelly says:

    A lovely grace note to end on, lightened the mood and suggested his frame of mind is more resilient than first appears. Nicely done.

  4. At least he didn’t lose his sense of humour too. Nice one.

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  5. pennygadd51 says:

    An ingenious take on the prompt. As others have said, it’s nice to have the main character use humour to deal with his disability.

  6. Liz Young says:

    Poor man – I feel for him. IT’s awful when you return expecting things to be the same and they aren’t.

    • I got lost in my home town after being away for 8 years as the one way streets went the other way and my shortcuts had properties built on them.

  7. lisarey1990 says:

    Flowed wonderfully.

  8. yarnspinnerr says:

    Loved that ending.

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