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‘Did you see him?’
‘The man on the platform.’
‘What man? There are about a hundred down there!’
‘The one in the hoodie. Can’t be more that eighteen years old.’
‘No, can’t say I did. Why do you ask?’
‘He was looking at me.’
‘George, we’re in the control room. How could he be looking at you?’
‘He knew where the camera was, and he was looking straight at me.’
Cyril adjusted the focus as George continued to look at the screen. All he could see now were trains passing through and a horde of commuters boarding or alighting.
George broke out into a cold sweat as he remembered why the man’s face was familiar and what it meant.
There was a tap on the door and through the peep-hole, he saw a young man dressed in a hoodie, knowing he’d come to collect his soul.

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I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination and wacky sense of humour which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and am a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! We have recently lost our beloved dog Maggie who adopted us as a 7 week old pup in March 2005. We decided to have a photo put on canvas as we had for her predecessor Barney, and now have three pictures of our fur babies on the wall as we found a snapshot of my GSD so had hers done too. From 2014 to 2017 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat where we made strong friendships both on and off the water. We were close to nature enjoying swan and duck families for neighbours, and it was a fascinating chapter in our lives. We now reside in a small bungalow on the Lincolnshire coast where we have forged new friendships and interests.
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  1. Really nice creepy stuff there! 😀

  2. Michael says:

    Nicely written Di, lots of tension and doubt among the characters.

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