Tale Weaver- #171- May 17th – Light

Over to Michael for this week’s Tale Weaver Challenge.

I’m cheating today as I wrote this four years ago but it seems to fit this week’s Tale Weaver.

When the Light Goes Out (originally posted 26th February 2014)

The pain shot through her chest with such force, it took her breath away.
Another slammed into her, knocking her senses into orbit.
Not now. Oh please, not now.

She was all ready and looking forward to meeting her friends. They hadn’t seen each other for so very long, and had so much to catch up on.
Another shock, and she started to hear voices.
Oh, the light. That damn light.
The light was so bright it was hurting her eyes.
She didn’t want to go towards it. She wanted to stay where she was.
She had PLANS for heaven’s sake!
‘Leave me alone!’ she shouted, but nobody heard her.

Another spasm.
She felt her heart beating again, a rhythmic thudding in her head.
The only thing in her head.
Then nothing.
The light went out.

‘She’s back with us now,’ the doctor said putting the torch in his pocket.
The emergency crew wheeled the crash cart away, their shoes squeaking on the polished floor.
The nurses checked her drips and tubes. They re-arranged the sheets and pillows.
The monitors blipped and beeped, doing everything for her.

No-one noticed the single tear that slipped from under her closed lids.


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination and wacky sense of humour which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and am a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! We have recently lost our beloved dog Maggie who adopted us as a 7 week old pup in March 2005. We decided to have a photo put on canvas as we had for her predecessor Barney, and now have three pictures of our fur babies on the wall as we found a snapshot of my GSD so had hers done too. From 2014 to 2017 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat where we made strong friendships both on and off the water. We were close to nature enjoying swan and duck families for neighbours, and it was a fascinating chapter in our lives. We now reside in a small bungalow on the Lincolnshire coast where we have forged new friendships and interests.
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15 Responses to Tale Weaver- #171- May 17th – Light

  1. Michael says:

    Just this afternoon Di I heard my older brother is having a quadruple bypass next week. He thought he was invincible up until today….but he’s a fairly fit guy so we hope he goes ok.
    I like you piece by the way and thanks for adding to the tale weaver.

  2. James Pyles says:

    Dodged a bullet. I see you went with the “don’t walk into the light” theme.

    • Sadly they re-sussed her, so she couldn’t join her departed friends and family.

      • James Pyles says:

        It’s not like she’ll never die. She’ll be with them someday.

      • As will we all. Depends how long she’s been kept alive by machines, not that she’d know much about it I guess.

      • James Pyles says:

        I must have misunderstood. I thought she made a full recovery. My Dad died last year, but when I found him in bed gray and cold, I called 911 and did CPR on him until the EMTs arrived. Amazingly, they resuscitated him, but the doctors at the hospital told us he’d never “come back”. Mom and I made the decision to let him go and they stopped the drugs and machines. He passed about an hour later.

      • I remember you saying before about your Dad’s passing. I am truly sorry for your loss.
        It was similar with my Dad. He had a massive heart attack and they brought him back twice. He was wired up to machines, but they took them away after two days as he was breathing on his own. He never regained consciousness though and the ICU staff told us there was ‘nothing upstairs’. He died four days later, Mum and I were at his side holding his hands.
        It’s interesting how we interpret other people’s posts…. when I originally wrote this, it was from the point of view of someone who had been in a coma for years and suddenly she was ‘ready to go’ but the medical profession brought her back and she slipped away again into a life of ‘nothing’. It wasn’t until I read your comment that I could see it from another angle. Definitely food for thought.

  3. calmkate says:

    this is very well written, I am impressed!

    • Thank you Kate. As I said in my intro, it’s an old post, one that didn’t get that much interest to be honest.

      • calmkate says:

        isn’t that the way, we post a stunner and few notice, we post one we perceive as mediocre and others love it … something I struggle to understand!

      • I know exactly what you mean! Some of the stuff I’ve been really pleased with has received little response and yet something else which I don’t think is all that good is very popular! Still, I enjoy it and the interaction which makes me want to do better!

      • calmkate says:

        agreed … the internet is both wondrous and confusing!

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