Friday Fictioneers: 23rd February

Details of these challenges can be found at Rochelle’s blog
This week’s photo prompt is provided by  Marie Gail Stratford

I was beautiful once,
Admired from afar by many.
I’d turn my face to the sun,
Feel it’s warmth penetrate my skin,
Giving me that summer blush
You loved so much.
Now I am old and dying.
Just as you, now passed,
No longer here to tend me,
Treasure me, caress me.
Dry and parched,
My beauty has fallen,
Decorating the earth
In which I stand.
It won’t be long before
I am cast out,
No longer beautiful.
But my children will scatter
In the breeze,
And together we shall live


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination and wacky sense of humour which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and am a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! We have an elderly dog called Maggie who adopted us as a 7 week old pup in March 2005. From 2014 to 2017 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat where we made strong friendships both on and off the water. We were close to nature enjoying swan and duck families for neighbours, and it was a fascinating chapter in our lives. We now reside in a small bungalow on the Lincolnshire coast where we have forged new friendships and interests.
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25 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: 23rd February

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Beautifully done, with a hopeful ending tinged with sadness.

  2. Moon says:


  3. James says:

    Which is why we have children and grandchildren. They are our hope for the future.

  4. pennygadd51 says:

    I like the hope in this. Those patterns that make us/that we make will persist far into the future.

  5. jillyfunnell says:

    My children will scatter in the breeze. Beautiful.

  6. granonine says:

    Poignant and heartfelt. Loved the voice.

  7. Dale says:

    Very wonderfully done…

  8. What a beautiful sentiment. Loved it.

  9. Rowena says:

    This is beautiful, tinged with a wistful sadness and yet also bringing hope. Well done.
    On the boat front, I just thought I’d share that my 14 year old son has been sailing with the local club. Last night, they did a twilight sail where the juniors got to skipper a member’s yacht with minimal assistance and my son came first in his division. Very proud of him, but also very touched by how the owner of the boat welcomed him onboard as a peer and shook his hand and gave him respect. That made my day and thanks to my super doopy zoom lens, I’ve captured it for eternity. Well, we all know eternity isn’t quite what it used to be…a couple of weeks perhaps?
    Best wishes,

    • So glad your son enjoyed his experience and did so well. The boating community is wonderful. It was one of the things we noticed first of all, regardless of whether you had a sail boat, cruiser, narrow like us or wide beam, you all had one thing in common….. a boat. We miss it, but know we did the right thing last year.
      Glad you liked my poem too, Thanks. 🙂

      • Rowena says:

        I don’t get down to the club very often and my husband does the sailing with him. My husband is fairly social but it takes him awhile to remember people’s names and I’ve noticed he names everyone done there, so that’s a very good reflection on the community down there.
        We were concerned about our son as he hadn’t found his thing and was floundering a little while his sister is becoming an accomplished dancer and my dad got behind him getting the Flying 11. It’s done wonders for him and he’s becoming a respected young man done there, which is fantastic. Warms my heart!

      • I’m glad your son has found an interest and hope he continues to enjoy sailing and the community spirit. My sister and I are so different, yet Dad was able to encourage us as individuals. Whereas I loved to play cribbage and play the piano, Dad taught her judo and took her fishing. One of my foster boys was into playing pool and played for the Youth Club he attended. He was pretty damn good!! Really pleased for your boy.

  10. Joy Pixley says:

    Such a sad beginning, all the losses of age, so I really liked the positive twist at the end.

  11. Beautiful!
    We seem to have similar thoughts and similar writing!
    If you check mine out you will understand!

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