Friday Fictioneers: 16th June 2017

This week’s photoprompt has been provided by © Dale Rogerson for

A few saw him leave but thought nothing of it.
It was a beautiful night, people sitting outside on the terraces enjoying the warm evening.
Gentle guitar music could be heard in the background and some of the guests were dancing, the mood relaxed.
Tom noticed something else and picking it up, quickly followed.
‘Excuse me,’ he said when he caught up outside. ‘I think you left this.’
The unobtrusive briefcase was offered, and the man shook his head nervously.
‘Not mine, mate.’ he replied.
‘Are you sure? You left in an awful hurry and this was under your table.’
‘Nope. Definitely not.’ He hailed a taxi. ‘ You’d better hand it in.’
He got in and the vehicle sped away.
Tom looked at the case and was a little worried.
Leaving it on the roadside, he called Security.

It now lay open on the superintendent’s’ desk, exposing its contents:
Rip offs of ladies designer lingerie.


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and have a terrible sweet tooth. Best friends are Hubby, our dog Maggie, Bro in NZ, MSM and MOH (and his dog). I am also a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! Due to a nightmare of a house sale in 2014, 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat until April 2017. We made strong friendships both on and off the water, and enjoyed swan and duck families for neighbours. Sadly times change and we were once again house hunting until September. We now reside in a small bungalow a short distance from the beach on the Lincolnshire coast.
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26 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: 16th June 2017

  1. Moon says:

    Oh my ! What a delightfully unpredictable last line . Love it.

  2. Hah – you led me down one path and then surprised me. (I think you need to get rid of the s on rips.)

  3. jellico84 says:

    Much better find than what it could have been. Hehehe. Better outcome. I’ll take your briefcase anyday if that is the contents. LOL! 🙂

  4. Rowena says:

    Loved this. Well done. Here in Australia, no doubt like most countries, we’ve been advised to report unidentified packages. While this obviously has a very serious side, it’s also brought about some funny situations. That kid who leaves their bag behind like forgetful kids have been doing forever sparking a security alert. Our local breakfast radio host bought a new pair of shoes and was looking for a bin to dispose of her old pair in the box. She felt very conscious of depositing an unidentified package in a bin . Her co-host also pointed to the toxic effects of the smell. It turned into quite an item on the show.
    xx Rowena

    • When I worked for a High Street bank in the 70s, there was a suspicious package left in our foyer. Our manager called the police who despatched a young cop relatively new to the job. In light of current bomb scares, he called the bomb squad and we were all evacuated. Turned out to be someone’s ready made meal of frozen fish and chips.

  5. Haha!! You got me with the last line. Awesome! :o)

  6. michael1148humphris says:

    What a delightful twist,

  7. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    I expected a much darker end. Nicely done.

  8. granonine says:

    Great twist. From the fear to the fun 🙂

  9. amiewrites74 says:

    Lovely twist! Loved it!

  10. Michael Wynn says:

    Best course of action. Good job he was alert, someone else might have handed it in and effectively done the bomber’s job for them. Presuming there is a bomb inside.

  11. Dale says:

    The tension was building and building and then…. a guffaw escaped my lips! Love this!

  12. A relief at the end of what seemed to be a scary story; nice twist.

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