Microfiction challenge: Looking for pebbles

Thanks Jane, I’ve missed your painting challenges so was glad to see this one pop up in my reader tonight.

pebblesPainting: Greek girls picking up pebbles by Frederick Leighton.

It was a punishment.
The girls had been caught entertaining four handsome but silly young brothers unchaperoned, and their father had given them strict instructions to gather all of the pebbles on the beach.
They had been here all day, and every time they thought they’d collected the last one, another group of them would be seen glinting in the sunshine.
Their skirts heavily laden, they continued their quest into the failing light.

From the castle balcony, The King looked down on his children.
‘Do you think they’ve learned anything?’ The Queen asked.
‘Only that there are an awful lot of pebbles in the sand,’ The King chuckled.
‘Same as there are a lot of suitors for them to choose from I suppose.’  his wife answered.
The King turned away from the window and his friend appeared behind him.
‘You can stop your spell now Merlin,’ he said.


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and have a terrible sweet tooth. Best friends are Hubby, our dog Maggie, Bro in NZ, MSM and MOH (and his dog). I am also a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! Due to a nightmare of a house sale in 2014, 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat until April 2017. We made strong friendships both on and off the water, and enjoyed swan and duck families for neighbours. Sadly times change and we were once again house hunting until September. We now reside in a small bungalow a short distance from the beach on the Lincolnshire coast.
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10 Responses to Microfiction challenge: Looking for pebbles

  1. Michael says:

    Great take Di…loved the ending….I think they may have learned one lesson, picking up pebbles endlessly is murder on your back….

  2. Lorraine says:

    Wonderful tale to go with the picture Jane chose. I especially enjoyed the last line.

  3. I like this story. Well-paced and with a nice twist in the tail 🙂

  4. Joy Pixley says:

    What a great analogy — an awful lot of pebbles in the sand, I like it!

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