Microfiction challenge #25: The red tree

Nip over to Jane Dougherty’s blog for this week’s challenge.


the-red-treeImage by illustrator Virginia Frances Sterret from a book of French fairy tales

Eleyna stood before the tree and teased it to respond.
‘Come on,’ she said softly. ‘It can’t be that difficult. You’re half way there already’.
The tree stood tall and slender, refusing to use its magic to do her bidding.
Eleyna grinned and continued ‘I bet you thirty pennies you can’t do it!’
The tree shivered and bowed its elegant fingers towards her, cupping her under the chin.
In the sweet voice Eleyna had come to know and love, it tinkled laughter and said
‘I can do it. You know I can, but I’m not going to. It’s too early’.
‘But what could be earlier than Christmas?’ she exclaimed.
The tree shimmered as it giggled.
‘I have given you a variety of baubles on my boughs. That should be enough.’
Before Eleyna could reply, the tree went on,
‘I am a Magical Redwood. We are meant to be sleek in design and radiate simplistic beauty. I hate the colour green, it doesn’t suit me, but for one day a year I comply with your wishes. Besides, there is no way I am going to put on extra poundage to portray myself as a clumsy pine with all those annoying needles just so as you can stick some silly decorations on me for a week!’


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and have a terrible sweet tooth. Best friends are Hubby, our dog Maggie, Bro in NZ, MSM and MOH (and his dog). I am also a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! Due to a nightmare of a house sale in 2014, 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat until April 2017. We made strong friendships both on and off the water, and enjoyed swan and duck families for neighbours. Sadly times change and we were once again house hunting until September. We now reside in a small bungalow a short distance from the beach on the Lincolnshire coast.
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12 Responses to Microfiction challenge #25: The red tree

  1. Even trees have their pride 🙂

  2. Michael says:

    I loved the ending..very clever take Di..well done to you… I do like the notion of a magical redwood….works well i think..

  3. Pingback: Microfiction challenge The Red Tree: the entries – Jane Dougherty Writes

  4. ellenbest24 says:

    A tender piece absolutely enchanting the touch under her chin especially woke it for me. Very clever use of the trees voice.

  5. merrildsmith says:

    I love your depiction of the tree with its shimmer and giggles and tender motions.

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