Microfiction challenge #18: Lost

Check out Jane’s original post here:

A story but not about being drowned, eh Jane?
OK. I’m up for it, so here goes:

microfiction-lostIt was cold and they were all soaked to the skin.
Charlie and Ben brought Eric to the shore whilst Karen wept and whined into the wind.
‘Don’t be so melodramatic!’ Charlie hissed.
‘Shut up!’ Ben mouthed.
Karen continued throwing her arms about, sobbing out her tormented grief.
In one unguarded moment, she smashed her elbow against the hull of the ship causing it to completely collapse.
‘CUT!!!’ yelled the director.

Eric looked up, and rolled his eyes.
‘Oh god, not another failed take! Can’t someone else be the drowned victim? I’m going to catch my death!’


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination and wacky sense of humour which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and am a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! In November 2020, we lost our beloved Maggie who adopted us as a 7 week old pup in March 2005. We decided to have a photo put on canvas as we had for her predecessor Barney. We now have three pictures of our fur babies on the wall as we found a snapshot of Kizzy, my GSD when Hubby and I first met so had hers done too. On February 24th 2022 we were blessed to find Maya, a 13 week old GSD pup who has made her own place in our hearts. You can follow our training methods, photos and her growth in my blog posts. From 2014 to 2017 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat where we made strong friendships both on and off the water. We were close to nature enjoying swan and duck families for neighbours, and it was a fascinating chapter in our lives. We now reside in a small bungalow on the Lincolnshire coast where we have forged new friendships and interests.
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8 Responses to Microfiction challenge #18: Lost

  1. I liked it. Made me smile 🙂

  2. Lovely twist at the end — and no one drowns, but could catch a cold. Enjoyed. Smileworthy.

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