Microfiction challenge #18: Lost

Check out Jane’s original post here:
https://wordpress.com/read/feeds/4205397/posts/1187505863

A story but not about being drowned, eh Jane?
OK. I’m up for it, so here goes:

microfiction-lostIt was cold and they were all soaked to the skin.
Charlie and Ben brought Eric to the shore whilst Karen wept and whined into the wind.
‘Don’t be so melodramatic!’ Charlie hissed.
‘Shut up!’ Ben mouthed.
Karen continued throwing her arms about, sobbing out her tormented grief.
In one unguarded moment, she smashed her elbow against the hull of the ship causing it to completely collapse.
‘Shit!’
‘CUT!!!’ yelled the director.

Eric looked up, and rolled his eyes.
‘Oh god, not another failed take! Can’t someone else be the drowned victim? I’m going to catch my death!’

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About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and have a terrible sweet tooth for jelly babies or fruit pastilles. Best friends are Hubby, our dog Maggie, Bro in NZ, MSM and MOH (and his dog). I am also a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! Due to a nightmare of a house sale in 2014, 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat until April 2017. We made strong friendships both on and off the water, and enjoyed swan and duck families for neighbours. Sadly times change and we were once again house hunting until September. We now reside in a small bungalow a short distance from the beach on the Lincolnshire coast.
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8 Responses to Microfiction challenge #18: Lost

  1. I liked it. Made me smile 🙂

  2. Lovely twist at the end — and no one drowns, but could catch a cold. Enjoyed. Smileworthy.

  3. Pingback: Microfiction challenge Lost: the entries – Jane Dougherty Writes

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