Microfiction challenge #16: Lovers

The painting for this week’s challenge, entitled ‘Lovers’, is by Felix Nussbaum.
Thanks Jane!


‘You know it’s for the best,’ he said, wrapping his arm around her shoulders, pulling her into the warmth of his body.
‘And you’re sure no-one will find out?’ she whispered.
‘No-one will ever know. Trust me.’
The girl shivered.
It was the chance of a lifetime, an opportunity for better things, a new beginning, but it came at a high price.
Together, they hurried towards the turret.

Two anxious faces peered at their approach from the other side.
Huddled in thick woollen coats, hats and mittens, they had been waiting over an hour for this rendezvous.
No money had changed hands, just a solemn promise between friends.

The precious bundle was passed tenderly from one pair of trembling arms to another.
The girl looked up through tear spiked lashes into the face of a stranger.
For a minute, she didn’t want to let go, but knew she faced certain death if she didn’t. These people would bring up her child as their own in surroundings far better than she could ever offer.
A brief smile, a tentative ‘Thank you’ and they were gone.


About pensitivity101

I am a retired number cruncher with a vivid imagination which extends to short stories and poetry. I love to cook and have a terrible sweet tooth. Best friends are Hubby, our dog Maggie, Bro in NZ, MSM and MOH (and his dog). I am also a bit of a dog whisperer as I get on better with them than people sometimes! Due to a nightmare of a house sale in 2014, 'Home' was a 41 foot narrow boat until April 2017. We made strong friendships both on and off the water, and enjoyed swan and duck families for neighbours. Sadly times change and we were once again house hunting until September. We now reside in a small bungalow a short distance from the beach on the Lincolnshire coast.
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11 Responses to Microfiction challenge #16: Lovers

  1. Bernadette says:

    Lovely but very sad. I can see them peering down at that sweet face that will soon become a memory.

  2. joyroses13 says:

    Oh very good! I was drawn in as to wondering what they were doing. Keep writing!

  3. There’s a lot in this story, far more than you have written, the very best kind of short fiction. Great stuff!

  4. Pingback: Microfiction challenge Lovers: the entries – Jane Dougherty Writes

  5. merrildsmith says:

    Wonderful. I really wanted to know what was happening, but I didn’t suspect what it would be. So sad, but hopefully that baby has a good life.

  6. So sad. Very well constructed, led me in beautifully.

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